How did I do? Hmmm… So I need to review how I think I have done against the criteria and make notes… Let me go look at the criteria… I’ll be right back…
Okay so I am to be assessed on the following:
Presentation and technical correctness
Because of my job as a secretary my grammar and punctuation are good (but working in the USA for many years has introduced variations from the UK way). While writing sentences so full of description, I think I might have left out a comma or two. I am a little unclear when writing sentences that are unusual if they follow the same rules or if rules can be a bent a little (for example, poetry can be written without a capital letter at the beginning of a sentence).
I have an ear for language and rhythm. I can tell when it is working and when it is not. The problem at times is I can hear it is not working but I am not sure how to change it. In Steam Train for example, I feel that the beginning was full of description but then when we got on the train, it feel it goes into more telling instead of showing. I still am not sure how to change that. I guess I need more practice.
I definitely experimented with the pieces in this course and I think I tried to let go and bring something different than what I usually write. I am pleased with the creativity in them especially with Meerkat. I think I was able to bring that animal alive with my words which I found quite exciting.
Reading Patti Smith’s M Train inspired me during my assignment, but I am not sure that this shows in my writing. Except for the fact that I was inspired by how she brought poetical language into her stories – into her prose. The same with Lauren Slater’s Welcome to my Country. And I have tried to do the same.
Craft of writing
In Steam Train, I like how I was able to go from the garden to the train via memory. Meerkat shows movement and the way that the animal stands proud – I was able to do this with describing a line at a time – adding layer upon layer. My favorite is York Minster – those eight lines came from about 30. Continuing with free writing even though it is tough and frustrating, I have found some gems. I do think I am at the beginning with this craft and have a lot to learn.